1.簡單敍述一下這位同學生病的情況
2.同學、老師和我是如何幫助他/她的.
3.人與人之間的這種相互關愛給我的感受是
例1.
One day, we are all in classroom. Wang fang said, Oh! We all see her and found that she was crying! Teacher turned to ask her what was wrong. She said, I do got a fever, my head is very hot! Feng Gang sent she to hospital, we all followed they. In the hospital, doctor Wang give a inject to her, she gradually calm and not hot as before. We all thanked the doctor.
點評：未能按照題目要求寫，沒有着重寫同學、老師和我是如何幫助他/她的 人與人之間的這種相互關愛給我的感受是。條理不清，思路紊亂，大部分句子均有錯誤，有的甚至影響理解。
原文修改後：
One day, when we were all in classroom., Wang fang Suddenly cried,, Oh! We all looked at her and found that she was groaning. Teacher turned to ask her what was wrong. She said, I have got a fever, my head is very hot!
Immediately, our teacher sent her to hospital, and we all followed them. In the hospital, we asked doctor Wang to give an injection to her, and she gradually became calm and not as hot as before. We all thanked the doctor.
The day has passed, but it is clearly in my mind. I think if we can do things like that in the incident, the society will be better, and the relationship between people will be better as well!
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