國小英語作文範例及點評

篇一：國小英語作文範例及點評

My English Teacher

Miss Tang is my English teacher. She’s very pretty. She is tall and thin. She has two big eyes and a small mouth. Her hair is long. She likes cats very much. And she likes singing and dancing, too. Her English is very good. We often play games in English classes. She is very kind to us. We all love her.

【要領點評】

這篇作文的題目是“我的英語老師”，是一篇介紹人物的作文。小作者開門見山，直接點題，首先介紹了英語老師的姓名，然後逐一介紹了她的外貌特徵、喜好、英語水平、上課特點以及師生情感等。

小朋友們在寫作文時，要注意使用自己最熟悉的詞[組]，以免寫出一些錯句子。寫作時要注意意思連貫、語句通順、標點正確、書寫清晰、規範等。

My Days of the week

I’m a student and I am in Grade 5.I get up at six o’clock every day. I have breakfast at half past six, and go to school at seven o’clock. I have classes from Monday to Saturday. I have an English class on Friday and I have a PE class on Tuesday. I don’t have to go to school on weekend, and I like going swimming on that day.

【要領點評】

這篇作文的題目是“我的一週”，小作者沒有説一些空話，而是從自己的親身經歷寫起，敍述了自己一週七天的所作所為，並特別強調了星期天的喜好，寫得自然、流暢。小朋友們寫作文時要注意人稱及謂語動詞的變化，要依據提示，結合自己的實際，寫自己身邊熟悉的事情。

I can help do housework

I am a girl. My name is Li Ling. I’m in Class Three, Grade Five. I’m very helpful at home. I can water the flowers, empty the trash and sweep the floor. After meals, I can help my mother do the dishes. On Sunday, I can wash the clothes. What about youAre you helpful, too

【要領點評】

本篇作文的題目是“我可以幫助做家務”，作者主要敍述自己在家幫助做的事情，介紹自己的名字，所在年級及在家能做的家務，很詳細，到位。

小朋友們在寫作時，應儘量寫一些親自經歷的事情，這樣會避免在作文時顯得太空，因為只有自己經常做的事情印象才會特別深刻。寫作時還要注意大小寫和時態。

My Village

My village is very beautiful. There are many houses in the village. Near the village, there is a forest. A small river is in front of the village. The water in it is very clean. We can see some fish in the river. Near the river, you can see a mountain. Some flowers and grass are on the mountain. I like my village. Welcome to my village!

【要領點評】

本文以“我的村莊”為題描述了自己家鄉的風景。介紹了村莊的房屋、森林、河流及大山，使人看了這篇作文後確實感覺到“我的村莊”的美麗。小朋友們在寫作時，可仔細想一下自己的村莊或所在城市的特點，儘量使用本單元學過的單詞或短語進行敍述。

My weekend

There are two days on the weekend, Saturday and Sunday. On Saturday, I often go to my dancing class in the morning and do my homework in the afternoon, and I often help my mother do some cleaning. On Sunday, I always visit my grandparents in the morning and do some reading in the afternoon. After dinner, I often watch TV with my parents. At that time, we can talk with each other and say something happily. We often have a good time.

【要領點評】

寫法：這篇習作是按照時間順序記敍週末的活動，記敍了週六和週日的上午和下午分別做了哪些活動及對活動的感受。即：週六上午：舞蹈課→下午：做作業和幫媽媽做清潔→週日上午：看望祖父母→下午：閲讀→晚上：看電視，與父母交流→感受：高興和愉快。我們還可以選取週六和週日中的幾個比較主要的活動來寫，先説明什麼時間在什麼地方由什麼人做了什麼事，有什麼感受。再按照活動順序把活動內容寫清楚，最後抒發一下對這次活動或這個週末的感想。

時態：這篇短文我們可以用三種時態來寫：a.一般過去時（主要描述你上個週末是怎樣度過的）；b.一般現在時（主要描述你經常怎樣度過週末）；c.一般將來時（主要描述你要怎樣過週末）。這裏我們來表述平時是如何過週末的，所以採用一般現在時來寫。

注意：活動的相關表達方法可採用舊知識，eg.（例）起牀get up，和新知識，eg. Climb mountains去爬山中的un很容易錯寫成nu。還要注意不要出現病句，eg. “I often watch TV with my parents.”不要寫成 “I often with my parents watch TV .” 詞量上控制在50 ~ 80 之間。

My Seasons

We have four seasons in a year. I can do many interesting things in each season. In spring, the weather is cool and windy, I can fly kites when it’s windy. And I can go hiking with my family when it’s sunny and cool. I like hiking. Summer is hot in the north of China, but it’s not long time. I often go swimming. It can make me healthy and strong. I can also wear my beautiful dresses. Fall is a season with harvest. And I can eat delicious fruits in this season. I can watch the leaves fall. Winter comes, it’s often snowy in winter in my hometown. When it snows, everything is white. We can play with snow and make a snowman, skate and ski. And winter is my favourite season, because of the Spring Festival. I love seasons. I love the nature.

【要領點評】

寫法：這篇短文是描述“我的四季”，在寫法上，是根據春、夏、秋、冬四季的更替來寫的，先講明每個季節的特徵，之後再寫在這個季節中的主要活動或比較有代表性的活動。同時講一些自己的真實感受，最後闡述自己最喜歡的季節。在實際的寫作的時候我們還可以先寫出自己喜愛的季節及主要的活動內容，之後再去講其他幾個季節，還可以多講解一下地域的季節特徵和大自然中的其他景色，如：秋天的田地裏一片金黃，農民在收割等等，這樣寫出來的四季更貼近實際。

時態：這篇習作講的是“我的四季”，是比較慣常的一些行為，所以我們最好採用一般現在時和情態動詞結合活動的寫法。即：在什麼季節，天氣如何，我們可以做什麼。

注意：在寫作內容上，不可以像以往的內容那麼簡單，因為有四個季節，所以要寫明季節，季節天氣，季節性活動，活動的人，活動的感受等，要求句子順序要正確，在寫作中還要注意關聯詞的使用，如用了“因為”，就不能用“所以”，二者不可以同時出現。詞量要控制在80個詞以內。

My family

There are five people in my family. They are my grandma, grandpa, dad, mom and I. Look! Grandma is watching TV. Grandpa is reading a book. Dad is writing an e-mail. Mom is cooking dinner. I am doing my homework. I love my family!

【要領點評】

寫法：這篇習作介紹了自己家的家庭成員，以及此刻他們正在幹什麼，表達了自己對家人的感情。

時態：由於本單元主要講的是現在進行時態，所以建議採用現在進行時態。

句型：主語+be+動詞的現在分詞。

注意：本單元的重點是現在進行時態，注意在寫句子時要保持時態的完整性，即系動詞和動詞的ing缺一不可。

A Field Trip

It is a nice day. Our class will have a field trip today. The classmates are very excited.

Look! Here we are. There’re a lot of activities to do. Amy is watching insects. Peter is collecting leaves. They want to write a report. Mandy is catching butterflies in the woods. Tim and Bob are playing chess. Some of the classmates are having a picnic. There is a lot of delicious food to eat. Oh, who’s that over thereIt’s Miss White. What is she doingShe is taking photos. We had a very good time. I’ll never forget this field trip.

【要領點評】

寫法：這篇習作是按照郊遊時的畫面來描述的，記敍了同學們分別在郊遊中做了哪些活動及郊遊的感受。

時態：這篇文章可以用一般過去時和現在進行時來寫。由於本單元主要講的是現在進行時，所以，這裏我們採用現在進行時比較合適。

句型：××. is/are doing sth. She /He is doing sth. They’re doing sth.

注意：活動的相關表述法採用新舊知識相結合去寫。注意時態的轉換、描寫感受時用一般現在時。

Li Ying ’S Hobby

Li Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening.

Does she like dancingNo, she doesn’t. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her, too. She says her hobbies make her happy.

【要領點評】

這一篇寫愛好的文章,小作者的寫作思路很值得我們學習,他沒有具體寫到劉瑩的某一種愛好,而是從學習到課餘的多種愛好入手,對劉瑩的各種愛好進行了粗線條地勾畫.從“愛好”這個角度來看劉瑩的話，我們會覺得這個形象很飽滿。

小朋友們寫這種“敍事寫人”作文時，可以從兩個角度下手：一是具體地描繪；二是和上面小朋友一樣，粗線條地勾畫，二者各有所長，另處在行文中使用一些問句，使用一些轉述的話，可以使作文更有靈氣，避免了平鋪直敍的缺點。比如上文的“Does she like dancingNo, she doesn’t.”和“she says her hobbies make her happy.”就是十分不錯的句子，使讀者眼前為之一亮。

Don’t be against the traffic rules

I go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school by bike at 7:30 in the morning .I must cross two busy roads the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I can’t cross the road ,so I wait.

If the light turns green, I know it means “Go”, and then I walk across the road .I always ride on the right side of the road .I am never against the traffic rules.

【要領點評】

這篇作文的題目是“不要違反交通規則”，小作者沒有説一些空話，而是從自己的經歷寫起，敍述自己以什麼方式去上學，在上學的路上是怎麼做的，很形象。

小朋友們在作文時注意不要圖大，那樣很容易使文章顯得空洞，而要寫自己身邊熟悉的事情。要注意行文中字母的大小寫、句子的標點符號等。

I Love My Family

Here is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I.

My father is a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My mother is a teacher. She works in a school near my home. She goes to work by bike. After work, they like reading books. Who is the tall boyHe is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. He’s now in Beijing. He goes there by plane.

I love my family.

【要領點評】

一個平凡的題材，一篇生動的作文。這樣的命題，我們可能面對幾次，甚至幾十次了。但這位小朋友的筆端很是靈巧，了了數言，讓一個幸福的家庭躍然紙上，很值得我們去思考，我們能做到嗎？

小朋友的這篇作文除了語言優美之外，在結構上也有閃光之處。先總説，將自己的家人逐個介紹一遍，後分説，把家人的工作、上班方式，愛好一一細説。最後以一句話進行概括，起到點題的作用。我們在寫類似的作文的時候是不是也可以借鑑呢？

How to get to the science museum

We are going to the science museum tomorrow. There is an old thing show in the Museum. Do you know how we can get to the science museum

The science museum is next to the People’s Park. It’s isn’t far from our school. So we can go there on foot straight to the west from our school, next turn left at the post office and walk for about 5 minutes, then turn right at traffic lights. You can find the People’s Park on the right . Walk straight, and you’ll see the science museum.

【要領點評】

這篇作文的題目是“怎樣去科學博物館”。怎樣才算是一篇好作文呢？通過你的敍述，能讓別人很容易找到博物館，這應是最基本的要求。小作者在文中告訴我們什麼呢？首先他寫了去博物館的位置，最後濃墨重彩，指明從學校去博物館的具體路線，這條路線夠清晰吧！

小朋友們在寫這類作文的時候，總有些無從下手的感覺，不知從何説起。其實介紹路線，無非就是告訴他人某段路的起點和終點，還有就是如何從起點走到終點。要給他人説清楚，你自己首先得清楚，然後再通過自己的敍述，將路線清清楚楚得呈現出來。一定要注意行文中一些關鍵的地方，如在哪兒轉彎，向哪兒轉，經過哪些重要的交通標誌或顯眼的標誌建築等。這樣，你就能説清，別人也能弄明白。

Let’s have a nice day

It’s Sunday tomorrow .I’m going to the bookstore with my friends tomorrow morning are going to look for some good books all like reading books are going to eat our lunch at the restaurant. I like chicken, beef and

vegetables r lunch, we are going to the Summer Palace by bus. We are going to play near the Kunming Lake. Maybe we are going to row a boat on the lake , that will be relaxing. We are coming back at 5pm.

【要領點評】

怎樣才稱得上是“美好的一天”？有兩點不能忘記，一是安排得充實，二是安排得有意義。這兩點小作者無疑都想到了，上午去書店看書買書，中午在飯店吃飯，下午去頤和園玩耍、划船，豐富多彩！文章以時間為線索，敍述清楚，文筆也很優美。

小朋友們在寫這種敍事的文章時，要儘量給讀者交代好時間、地點、人物和活動等，使文章有血有肉。要看好是寫過去發生的事情，還是現在正在做的`事情，或計劃、打算要做的事情，以選擇適當的句型。如果是寫將來的事情，那麼就要注意在表述時多用

“be going to+動詞原形”這種句型。還有一點也很重要，那就是故事的線索要交代好，讓讀者在閲讀時對整個過程一目瞭然。

篇二：國小英語作文範例及點評

Li Ying ’S Hobby

Li Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening.

Does she like dancingNo, she doesn’t. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her, too. She says her hobbies make her happy.

【要領點評】 這一篇寫愛好的文章,小作者的寫作思路很值得我們學習,他沒有具體寫到劉瑩的某一種愛好,而是從學習到課餘的多種愛好入手,對劉瑩的各種愛好進行了粗線條地勾畫.從“愛好”這個角度來看劉瑩的話，我們會覺得這個形象很飽滿。 小朋友們寫這種“敍事寫人”作文時，可以從兩個角度下手：一是具體地描繪；二是和上面小朋友一樣，粗線條地勾畫，二者各有所長，另處在行文中使用一些問句，使用一些轉述的話，可以使作文更有靈氣，避免了平鋪直敍的缺點。比如上文的“Does she like dancingNo, she doesn’t.”和“she says her hobbies make her happy.”就是十分不錯的句子，使讀者眼前為之一亮。

Don’t be against the traffic rules

I go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school by bike at 7:30 in the morning .I must cross two busy roads the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I can’t cross the road ,so I wait.

If the light turns green, I know it means “Go”, and then I walk across the road .I always ride on the right side of the road .I am never against the traffic rules.

【要領點評】這篇作文的題目是“不要違反交通規則”，小作者沒有説一些空話，而是從自己的經歷寫起，敍述自己以什麼方式去上學，在上學的路上是怎麼做的，很形象。小朋友們在作文時注意不要圖大，那樣很容易使文章顯得空洞，而要寫自己身邊熟悉的事情。要注意行文中字母的大小寫、句子的標點符號等。

I Love My Family

Here is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I.

My father is a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My mother is a teacher. She works in a school near my home. She

goes to work by bike. After work, they like reading books. Who is the tall boyHe is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. He’s now in Beijing. He goes there by plane.

I love my family.

【要領點評】 一個平凡的題材，一篇生動的作文。這樣的命題，我們可能面對幾次，甚至幾十次了。但這位小朋友的筆端很是靈巧，了了數言，讓一個幸福的家庭躍然紙上，很值得我們去思考，我們能做到嗎？小朋友的這篇作文除了語言優美之外，在結構上也有閃光之處。先總説，將自己的家人逐個介紹一遍，後分説，把家人的工作、上班方式，愛好一一細説。最後以一句話進行概括，起到點題的作用。我們在寫類似的作文的時候是不是也可以借鑑呢？

How to get to the science museum

We are going to the science museum tomorrow. There is an old thing show in the Museum. Do you know how we can get to the science museum

The science museum is next to the People’s Park. It’s isn’t far from our

school. So we can go there on foot straight to the west from our school, next turn left at the post office and walk for about 5 minutes, then turn right at traffic lights. You can find the People’s Park on the right . Walk straight, and you’ll see the science museum.

【要領點評】 這篇作文的題目是“怎樣去科學博物館”。怎樣才算是一篇好作文呢？通過你的敍述，能讓別人很容易找到博物館，這應是最基本的要求。小作者在文中告訴我們什麼呢？首先他寫了去博物館的位置，最後濃墨重彩，指明從學校去博物館的具體路線，這條路線夠清晰吧！小朋友們在寫這類作文的時候，總有些無從下手的感覺，不知從何説起。其實介紹路線，無非就是告訴他人某段路的起點和終點，還有就是如何從起點走到終點。要給他人説清楚，你自己首先得清楚，然後再通過自己的敍述，將路線清清楚楚得呈現出來。一定要注意行文中一些關鍵的地方，

如在哪兒轉彎，向哪兒轉，經過哪些重要的交通標誌或顯眼的標誌建築等。這樣，你就能説清，別人也能弄明白。

Planting Trees

It’s spring. It’s time to plant trees.

I want to plant a tree in our garden. Dad and Mum are very happy. They like green. Dad helps me plant the tree. First, we dig the soil. Then I put a

little tree into the soil. Next I water it. I am so excited and I wait for the tree to grow. Two weeks later, my tree has some little leaves. I water it every day. Now it has lots of leaves. It grows fast.

We should plant more trees. They make our world beautiful.

【要領點評】 小作者寫了一次植樹的經歷，但他並沒有單純拘泥於植樹的過程。既有過程，也有感覺，能使文章打動讀者，給人以啟發。作文的最後一段就非常好，兩句話勝似千言萬語。我們可以學習一下這種寫法。 既描述過程，又適時提自己的看法或想法的寫法，在作文中叫做“夾敍夾議”,描述過程為了提出一種思想服務，提出看法或想法使原本平實的描述有了意義。我們在以後的寫作中也可以試一試。

Let’s have a nice day

It’s Sunday tomorrow .I’m going to the bookstore with my friends

tomorrow morning are going to look for some good books all like reading books are going to eat our lunch at the restaurant. I like chicken, beef and vegetables r lunch, we are going to the Summer Palace by bus. We are going to play near the Kunming Lake. Maybe we are going to row a boat on the lake , that will be relaxing. We are coming back at 5pm.

【要領點評】 怎樣才稱得上是“美好的一天”？有兩點不能忘記，一是安排得充實，二是安排得有意義。這兩點小作者無疑都想到了，上午去書店看書買書，中午在飯店吃飯，下午去頤和園玩耍、划船，豐富多彩！文章以時間為線索，敍述清楚，文筆也很優美。 小朋友們在寫這種敍事的文章時，要儘量給讀者交代好時間、地點、人物和活動等，使文章有血有肉。要看好是寫過去發生的事情，還是現在正在做的事情，或計劃、打算要做的事情，以選擇適當的句型。如果是寫將來的事情，那麼就要注意在表述時多用“be going to+動詞原形”這種句型。還有一點也很重要，那就是故事的線索要交代好，讓讀者在閲讀時對整個過程一目瞭然。